Sunday, August 2, 2009

The Second Poem - Comment Urgently and Seriously.

Here's that second poem, or song whichever you prefer. It's inspired by Black Keys - Jonas Brothers and Unknown Soldier - Breaking Benjamin. Here goes, comment and please give feedback.

Monochrome World -

I sit here as the green lights pass me by
The world is still going while I wait here, nothing waits for me.
The rainbow flies over these blue skies
A perfect world never seemed so Black and White.

Tell me why does this world seem so monochromatic
An untarnished panorama has never been this dull
Could you show me what's it like to see the world for what it is
Not this bleak painting across a dark sky.

The light's are out and here it is a faceless reality
Where everyone see's everything in a different light
I can't leave this world behind because even when everything is vibrant
There's no in between the lines for me to see

Monochromatic world's have never looked so beautiful
Vibrant skies have never been this dull
Hearts reaching out in the dark abyss
To touch the red lines beating out and leaving this world tonight.

Half-hearted attempts to reach through the colored walls
Have been blocked because the Green light's keep the world moving
Why can't it just turn to red now
The black walls are moving in, their moving in

Black and white have never looked so vibrant
The rainbow's have never seemed so dull
Green lights keep the world moving past
And Red lights keep the world turning to Ash
So let's live where there's no in between
Just you and Me.

3 comments:

Karly said...

that poem/song left drool rolling down my chin!!! lol, jk, but it's awesome!!! another thing, waaaaaaaaah? very confusing for the simple minded!!! I will continue to have enough fun for the both of us!!! but i don't think i'll b bloging nemor. i'mma delete mine cuz i kno once school starts i won't have a chance to work on it. sry.

the one and only Karly!!!

Cruz said...

well it read more like it'd be a song more than a poem, or maybe I'm just hearing imaginary music in my head as I read it LOL

I really liked it, as I read it I was like forming an idea of what it was about, your perspective of the world versus others views but then at the end it was kinda like heck with it all, it's just about you and me. so I thought it was a great way to end it

hehe you listen to the jonas brothers xD

*hugglz* Cruz

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