Thursday, April 2, 2009

Two Poems.

These are two poems that I've written. Please Comment and give feedback. I crave it. Please.

Just For Her

Here she stands
The girl I look at from a distance
I wish I could tell her how I feel
How my world would be black without her
How my life would be a living hell without her.

There she goes
As I watch from behind my glass booth
I want her to be happy
Even if it means breaking my heart
To see her be with someone else.

Does she care
That with every move she makes
I find myself farther from her
And almost dying of my love
To be near her.

Well I don't care
If she doesn't know how my heart beats for her.
I don't care
If she doesn't see me in front of that glass.
I don't care
If she doesn't see that I'm dying without her.

Because to live in a world where she's just there,
Is enough to keep me living on another day.
To see her smile and her face
I can bear the pain.

I love her.
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A Big Disappointment

Is it worth the struggle,
To do something and see no fruition?
Is the trial worth the tribulation,
When there is only disappointment at the end?

I search with my soul,
The answer to this question.
There is no good, there is no bad
Only the fire of a forked tongue,
In my pathway pelting me with
Stones on the way down.

Is life worth the disappointment
When you look and see that the road
Has no panoramic view?
When there is fire and brimstone
Lining my path and redemption seems
Like a dream.

Is life worth living,
If I feel like a big disappointment
To everyone on the way?
The answer is so close,
Yet not quite there.
But when the fire and brimstone path ends
I'll be waiting for the answer.

6 comments:

Skye said...

That's really really good!!!

Nice job Bro!

Fly on forever!

The Girl Who Could Fly

Cruz said...

It's good, I like the brimstone references somehow made it seem more gothic and dark... but curious what was so disappointing? and that's 2 poems? it reads like one... I hope the inspiration for this poem wasn't something in reallife cause it's kinda sad *hugglz special*

Alter Cosmos said...

Sorry, Only one poem. Putting the second one up soon enough.

Skye said...

The second poem is brilliant Bro! Love it! Keep up the good work! Let me know if you get to listen to those recordings! I want to know how bad I am at singing! LOL

I can't believe I just missed you on gaia by a few minutes! :(

Fly on forever!

The Girl Who Could Fly

Cruz said...

omg! that was so sad and sweet I almost cried! didn't tho but I got that weird lumpy thing in my throat lol GREAT poem. I loved it! *hugglz special*

Skye said...

Did you do a new post then get rid of it? It has the start of a different post on my blog where I've a clipping from your blog.

Fly on forever!

The Girl Who Could Fly